Learning a new skill: The Trailer Revisited

(Or, it’s back to school for me.)

Editor Linda Yezak donned a flak jacket before writing to tell me what was wrong with the Sailing out of Darkness trailer. When I said that I LOVE constructive criticism, she breathed a sigh and shed the jacket. “I was sweating in there.”

I don’t know about you, but when someone I respect makes suggestions, I’m going to listen. Why? Because I want to learn to be the best “me” possible. I knew I wouldn’t be sending my work to Hollywood, and I also knew professionals could have done a better job than I, but I can’t afford the professionals and thus am grateful for all the help someone offers.

Now, it’s time to move on. Get back to my rewrites. Get the house cleaned for my daughter’s visit. In other words, stop tinkering with Animoto and get to work.

But before I do that, here’s the shortened, updated, edited version. What do you think?

 

 

8 Replies to “Learning a new skill: The Trailer Revisited”

    1. The site I’m using to make these doesn’t give me the voice-over option, Marina. You’re probably right about the text, but it’s so hard to know. Thanks for the suggestions! Perhaps when I finish a few chores, I’ll see what else I can do… Maybe, or maybe not. I know my husband is very tired of me saying, “One more look?”

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